“Alright we have 15 minutes, till we leave,” said my mom while she was shutting her suitcase, even though it wouldn’t shut. I walked away to make sure that I had everything. I zipped my up right away, and it was over flowing, a lot but it wasn’t even close to my moms. I returned to my kitchen where my mom was, her suit case was so big it looked like it was going to burst out and make everything fly everywhere. The taxi should be here but it isn’t then we looked at the clock and it was only 2:00 A.M. that meant that we had 2 more hours we were all tired and cranky.
In the 3rd sentence, you should make it sound better and error free by changing it to "I zipped mine up right away, and it was overflowing, but it wasn't even close to the size of my mom's." In the last sentence, to make it sound better and make sense (I changed it to 2 sentences): The taxi should be here, but it wasn't until then and noticed it was only 2:00 am. That meant we had 2 more hours to wait, and we were all tired and cranky.
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